Hi everyone welcome to this... because this is a good name for whatever it is this
Okay we start with a warning , because is knowns for everybody, my humor is so so... Special ,and maybe can be stupid and that history or that... Whatever it is, is a satira or a parody so... Before you seen this, if maybe you are fan of marvel or DC, or you hate the human stupidity, I'm sorry . Okay, now is true ,we start whit my history . First I wanna told you the theme of my history I thinking in doing something how everyone loves, and I think In superheroes , we lives whit superheros all the time, we Have comics, we have movies, songs, video games, actually we have a real superheros because when one person is important like, I don't know, for example the police, we call them superheroes, so I think in what happened if I doing a round to the lovely and clasics superheroes and that's what happens . Okay so everyone knows how is Marvel, the classic and famous company of comics and movies they have a lot famous superheros like for example, Ironman or Capitan America or Thor but we have a problem I call Stan Lee and is communicating maybe he's rest in peace... So marvel is doesn't marvel anymore, now is marvOl, I know is better , more cool, and okay we have other problem, everyone knows who is DC? Other company of comics they have Green Lintern, Superman, Batman ... Aquaman ... yeah I know marvel is better, but no problem because now DC is other, now is AB , more cool more new , I know , your welcome. So said this , you wanna said "why you drinking?" the answer of this is a lot of caffe but that's not the theme, we wanna met the protagonist, and is when I see the Simpsons when I see everyman or normal man in Spain and I see him powers and I'm fell in love, I wanna explain his superpowers, so I need your imagination okay, I knows my is gone but I need yours, so you have comic,for example "plastic man, the Chinese piece of iron man " and I'm normal man, so I fight Versus bad and I need a way so I puts my hand to your comic and all the powers of "plastic man" now is my body, and now I'm cute and powerful and sexy like Robert Downey Jr., And you wanna thinking against what fights normal man , what is the problem? He fights versus him worse villain "big blue thing " everyone knows goshbusters?, so the lovely character "slime" okay so...big and blue... I know I'm a genius . But normal man have a problem, he can't do it alone so he call a special super heroes . The idea for create this characters is doing to the classic super heroes around and turn them to anti heroes like Deadpool, so for example we have a capitan america, he's powerful, cool , patriotic, sexy, but now and I'm sorry for this, is doesn't anymore capitan America , now is capitan Germany, more patriotic than never. And what you said about spiderman , the most lovely superhero , he's so cute, so teenager, everyone loves Tom Holland so now is better ... He's mosquito man , he bites him enemies and then they have anemia and they die alone, but mosquito man don't doing nothing, he's a love . And hawk eye he's so strong he's always whit a total black look , but a hawk is so expensive so I've gone to a park and now is pigeon eye, is funny because if you said quickly sounds like a Pokemon " pigeon eye I choose you!! ". And the last is aquaman , he's cool... No he's a mess so he's the same, the joke is doing alone. So we gonna repass, we have a normal man fight Versus his terrible enemie "big blue thing" but hecan't doing alone so.. Who he gonna call?... And the answer is not goshbusters... yeah he call the special, new and mutants superheroes So can normal man win? Can "big blue thing " have a one more ridiculous name? And finally can the mutant superheros be cool again? We will see it in the next episode of "normal man ft justice league & avengers " (the name is provisional, I accept ideas) . Click here to see my prezi presentation
5 Comentarios
Madison Curtis
4/23/2018 09:44:46 am
The first line doesn't really make scene to me. When you say "First I wanna told you the theme of my story", instead you should say "First I want to tell you the theme of my story". You should make sure you proof read your work and make sure it sounds alright, also your grammar is a little confusing. You also should capitalize names and places. You also use "wanna" a lot instead of using wanna you should use want to.
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Matthew Craft
4/23/2018 09:46:27 am
Your blog entry is very good! It's funny and well written. I like your writing style.
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Heather Miller
4/23/2018 10:21:58 am
I really like the humor and little comments you make on your topic. Good job on placements on question marks, periods, and quotations. I like how interested you are in the topic. Some mistakes I see are grammar and how your story flows. I was a little bit confused at how you set up the beginning so I would revise that. Also names of people in stories should be capitalized. Make sure you have solid points in your story so it flows better and makes more sense. Also make sure when you use synopsis , use it in the correct form. Overall, I enjoyed your story and keep on getting better! :)
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Andrew Robeson
4/23/2018 10:31:35 am
The story is extremely good and it was able to hold my attention the whole time. I really enjoyed and chuckled at your new super heroes and other ideas that you came up with. There were some grammatical errors along with several spelling mistakes. For example your, "goshbusters," is actually Ghostbusters. Along with this, when you are describing the character Spider-Man, you said, "he's so cute, so teenager," instead of this, you can write, He's cute and very young. The film is better with Tom Holland playing Spider-Man. Besides these small problems and grammatical errors, the blog is very well written. With a little more practice you could become a very successful English writer.
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Nate Peoples
4/23/2018 10:36:18 am
Overall, the story is put together well. "because is knowns for everybody", should be corrected to, "because everybody knows". The introductory sentences are good, but they are not necessary for the story. In most sentences, the structure is fantastic. "whit" should be "what". The big problem I see is the use of past tense when it should be present. The sentence,"So said this, you wanna said" you should type, "So say this, you wanna say". The rest of the middle to end transitional paragraph is put together great. The last mistake I saw, which there are very few of, is,"he's so cute, he's so teenager." This should say, "he's so cute, he's such a teenager.
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