Hi everyone, my name is Mihai Cosmin Morosan but that you already know and today I'm going to present you a series of action and psychological terror called The Darkest Dungeon. Let's start talking about the world where it is located, it is in a parallel universe where our planet merged with another in an act called the lunar fusion and from that moment creatures from the other world began to pass ours and ours to theirs, countless dangers and creatures passed us by making human life difficult. Then coming from the other world appeared a new hope the witchers some professional mutants in eliminating the creatures of the two worlds at a price, they could be identified thanks to their medallions of wolf's head. Our protagonist is Torval a crusader who lost his family because of the horrors of the other world, seeking revenge he became a Witcher. Many months later he received a letter asking for his services in order to eliminate some beings from the other world and that if he accepted, he should go to a small town called Brill. Upon arriving, a man known as the Ancestor explained the seriousness of the situation and that if Torval could eliminate the creatures he could help him to reencounter with his family, since as he explained later he knows how to revive the dead thanks to that was in the other world. Torval, excited to be reunited with his family, accepted and the Ancestor introduced his new companions to the adventure that awaited them. First to Jontron the Ancestor I present him: Elusive, evasive, persistent. Righteous traits for a rogue in battle, Jonron would become Torval's best friend. Second to the nameless and he presented it: What better laboratory than the blood-soaked battlefield? and the company of someone who always listens to wounds, a lady who was a plague doctor who did not talk to anyone. And finally to Jark, and the ancestor simply said To fight the abyss, one must know it ... a magician from the other world capable of eliminating his victims with arcane powers. But what our heroes did not know was that the real curse of the darkest dungeon was not to return but to leave those who entered. The poor wretches left with paranoid consequences and sometimes they became so crazy that they stayed to be part of the darkest dungeon. The darkest dungeon
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Lennon
4/23/2018 09:43:24 am
The story was very nice, I would honestly buy this if it were a book, movie, game, or any kind media. The imagery and beginning caught my attention right away (and I have always liked this kind of fictional material) but overall it was good and the Prezi was very good, I also liked the real life references in the story. The images in the Prezi were nice as well. The sentencing flows pretty well the story is strong overall pretty well. Good job.
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Roegan Hines
4/23/2018 09:49:21 am
In your introduction you have a sentence that would sound better if it was "but you already know that". In this sentence you should add and in between world and where. Let's start talking about the world and where it is located. the other world began to pass ours and ours to theirs. In this sentence I think your trying to say the creature moved from planet to planet it would sound better if it was "Creatures from the other world traveled to our while we traveled to theirs.". In this next sentence It would sound better if you said "...a new hope the witchers, professional mutants that eliminate the creatures for a price." In this next sentence it would sound better if you put "he could help him to reunite with his family". In the sentence about reviving people it would sound better if it went " because as he explains later". This sentence should sound like this 'First to Jontron the Ancestor who is: Elusive, evasive, and persistent." But other than those few errors I really like the plot it sounds very sci-fi which I am a fan of myself.
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Madison Gibson
4/23/2018 10:29:07 am
In the sentence, " Let's start talking about the world where it is located, it is in a parallel universe where our planet merged with another in an act called the lunar fusion and from that moment creatures from the other world began to pass ours and ours to theirs, countless dangers and creatures passed us by making human life difficult." This is an extremely long sentence, it is known as a run on. Maybe try this, " Let's start talking about the world where it is located. It is in a parallel universe where our planet merged with another in an act called the lunar fusion. From that moment, creatures from the other world began to pass ours and ours to theirs. Countless dangers and creatures passed us by making human life difficult."
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